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I devoted myself to caring for my mother in her final days, putting everything on hold to be by her side. I was there for every meal, every moment, every labored breath. I thought I knew how this would end. But when the will was read, I was left with nothing.
The betrayal stung. But the truth behind her decision—and the secrets it uncovered—completely upended everything I thought I knew about my family… and about myself.
As I drove toward Mom’s house, the grief felt like a weight in my chest.
The funeral had been a week ago. Now it was time for the practical aftermath—the house, the will, the memories. As always, the responsibility fell on me. I was the dependable one. The steady one. The one who stayed.
Not Phoebe.
Phoebe was unpredictable, impulsive… broken in ways no one ever fully understood. And yet, I still worried about her. She was my sister.
Dan sat silently beside me in the car. The faint smell of alcohol clung to him. He had promised—again—that he was done drinking. I didn’t believe him anymore.
When we arrived at Mom’s house, the lawyer was already there, briefcase in hand.
“Why aren’t you inside?” I asked.
“It’s locked,” he said, nodding toward the house.
I frowned. “Phoebe said she’d be early.” I called her, but it went straight to voicemail. Typical.
Dan sighed behind me. “She needs a babysitter, not a house.”
“She’ll be here,” I muttered.
Moments later, Phoebe appeared, mascara streaked down her face, her hair a mess.
“Rough night?” I asked.
She smirked. “Is it that obvious?”
“Pull yourself together. The lawyer’s waiting.”
“Oh, please,” she scoffed. “We both know you’re getting the house. Golden child and all.”
I bit my tongue. I knew she was hurting, too.
We sat down as the lawyer began reading the will. His tone was flat—until he said something that shattered everything.
“The house and all assets are bequeathed to Phoebe.”
I blinked. “What? That can’t be right.”
The lawyer simply nodded. “This is what’s stated.”
Dan erupted. “My wife did everything! She deserves that house!”
Phoebe stood up, trembling, and fled the room.
I followed her out to the backyard—Mom’s favorite place.
“Sorry about Dan,” I said gently.
Phoebe didn’t look at me. “He’s always like that. You should leave him.”
“I can’t,” I said. “He’s my husband.”
We sat in silence. Then I said it: “Sell me the house.”
“What?” she said, stunned.
“You need money for your flower shop. Sell it to me. I thought Mom would leave it to me…”
“No.”
I blinked. “What do you mean, no?”
“She left it to me. And I’m keeping it.”
“You don’t deserve it!” I snapped. “I was there! I gave up everything!”
“And I had nothing!” Phoebe shouted, standing. “You have a job, a husband—even if he’s terrible—and you had that job offer overseas. You have choices. I have this house.”
“I turned that job down because I couldn’t leave you!” I screamed. “You wouldn’t have made it through this!”
“Then leave!” she shouted. “I’m not giving you the house!”
“Then I’ll take it,” I hissed, storming off.
I knew I wouldn’t. But Dan didn’t. He kept pressuring me to fight it. And eventually, I caved.
The lawyers got involved. Phoebe didn’t flinch through any of it. She acted like the house didn’t matter at all.
Then one night, I found a pile of overdue bills in Dan’s office. My stomach turned as I flipped through debt notice after debt notice.
“Explain this,” I demanded, confronting him.
His face paled. “It’s not what it looks like.”
“It’s exactly what it looks like. Are you in debt? Is that why you pushed so hard for the house?”
He looked away. “We can fix this.”
“We? You mean me, right?”
Finally, he broke. “Gambling.”
I felt sick. “So that’s what this was about. You wanted to sell Mom’s house to pay off your gambling debt.”
“If we sell it—if we win—I’ll quit. For good.”
“Like you quit drinking?” I said coldly.
He had no answer.
I walked out, keys in hand, and drove to Mom’s house.
Phoebe answered the door. “Here to convince me again?”
“No. Dan has been gambling. He’s in a lot of debt.”
Her face changed. She led me to the backyard. We sat in silence on Mom’s bench.
“We can sell the house and split it,” Phoebe offered softly.
I shook my head. “No. Mom left it to you. She wanted you to have it.”
“But you tried to take it.”
“I was angry. Dan pressured me. I let him. I was wrong.”
“You’re not paying his debt?” she asked.
“No. The only person I’d give everything up for… is you.”
She looked down, her voice quiet. “I’m sorry for yelling. I’ve always felt like I lived in your shadow. Everyone talked about how perfect you were. I was just the punchline.”
“Just like Mom,” I said, smiling through the tears.
Phoebe laughed. “Guess Mom wasn’t great at raising two girls.”
I smiled. “So… my plan? Leave Dan. Help you with your shop. And take that job overseas.”
Phoebe turned to me, her voice gentle. “You’ll be okay. And so will I.”
“I know,” I whispered, and pulled her into a hug.
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